#Choose where to read—it’s free.) https://lnk.bio/23off_Sugar
I spent 130+ hours on this chapter.
Unlike the previous parts, this one has a lot of conversational scenes, and I’d really like to know how naturally they come across.
Or do they feel cringey?))
Anyway, don’t hesitate to point out anything that feels off.
I’d also really appreciate your thoughts on the visuals. Some backgrounds are missing, but unfortunately, that’s an extreme measure I’ve had to take to save time.
Love that shot you’ve linked. Very cool. I’ll give it a read. 🙂
Thank you so much—please do let me know what you didn’t like!)
Very cool! Bookmarked to read when I have time
Thank you—do come back and share any thoughts you might have! 🙇
Nice art, I’ll read the other two
“3st Chapter” on the first page should be “3rd Chapter”
Thanks for pointing that out!)) Yes, that’s a typo; the previous text template had “2 st” I forgot to put it away … . 😩
It happens, just in case it comes up it would actually be 2nd, not 2st.
Art looks great. Will certainly give this a shot.
Thank you, I look forward to hearing your opinion )
Right off the bat: 3st chapter? 😂. Diggin’ the art, though! I’ll give it a read and get back to you.
I’m not a barbarian. I wouldn’t make people read everything.))
You can understand Chapter 3 perfectly well without reading the previous ones.
Ah… you mean the typo. I get it now.))
